A young mermaid wants to see
The ways of what’s above the sea
She begs and begs until she turns of age
That’s when she can finally gauge,
What’s up above on the shore.
She finally gets to see the lore.
A young man catches her attention
On a boat that ends up in a regression
She ends up saving him from the crash
And leaves him on the shore with a splash
And soon enough it became a bore
She saw what she needed to and not much more
But she still wished to be with the prince
And would do anything in a pinch
She sees a sea witch to help her
But before she knows it, it’s all a blur
Her tongue is cut out of her mouth
And that’s when it all went south
She only has her looks to please,
And doesn’t feel at all at ease.
When she gets the attention that she wants
She gets the man that she can flaunt
But then a princess gets in her way
And then her man falls astray,
Her time has run out and she’s out of luck
And how she has to die, that sucks!
She becomes a daughter of air,
And sees good deeds that children share
She doesn’t get her man
But she can get a new life plan.
I thought this was a cool interpretation of “The Little Mermaid.” The ability to fit the plot into a rhyme scheme is super impressive, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I like the informal mixture of phrases such as “And how she has to die, that sucks!” I thought it was a lovely touch. I believe that you’re modeling Roald Dahl, specifically the “The Three Little Pigs” story, as that rhyme scheme is more consistent than the “Little Red Riding Hood and the Wolf” rhyme scheme.
I agree with Gabby that you’re modeling your post after Roald Dahl. The rhyme scheme, informal/humorous diction, and poem form are all very reminiscent of his poetry. I really enjoyed this take on “The Little Mermaid”!!